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can You please edit this research paper. Make it better. The Writing Assignment: Write a 6-8 page research essay that speculates about the cause or causes of a phenomenon, incorporating research from a minimum of five sources. The essay should address the following components: Identify a phenomenon that is listed below and that is of particular interest to you Speculate about the cause(s) of that phenomenon Demonstrate the plausibility of the cause(s) with well-selected and researched support such as examples, analogies, comparisons, etc. Incorporate a minimum of five sources that come from a variety of sources, including print, databases, and online *** Since the paper will incorporate research, the body of the paper must incorporate signal phrases and MLA-style parenthetical citations that are keyed to a Works Cited page that appears at the end of the paper. You will need to cite your sources in the body of your work and have a Works Cited page.*** these are corrections. Your thesis (last sentence in your intro) doesn’t really make sense and doesn’t really have an argument in it. Just add a line or two talking about the implications of self-driving cars, pg 2-3. What do you mean by detecting fraud in card-based systems on pg 3 at the bottom. Go into more detail in that section. Be specific regarding “interpersonal and creative work-related aspects” as I’m not sure what you mean. When you say things like people will work better with AI, you need to explain how or give an example (especially pg 4-5). What do you mean by “soft tissue characterization” on pg 6? Stem cell research? The points in your paper are quite good, but you tend not to spend much time on each point. I wish you would dwell on some of your more compelling points rather than jumping off topic. In the earlier half of your paper, I feel less is more, but at the same time, I would like examples and citations for some of the situations you bring up. You may also want to consult some information tech people or anthropologists who specialize in the relationship between man and AI.