Raves, Drugs, and the Environment

Raves, Drugs, and the Environment

This is my draft so I need this to be made as my final draft. The professor suggests I need to connect the “environment” argument and the use of illicit drugs more because I “jump” from subject to subject without connecting the arguments well. I also need to put in personal pronounce since this is a personal/research essay. Please use the sources I have already used, I don’t need a work cited or title page I have those already done. My professor suggests I need to make the quotes I used to connect more with my paragraphs, she feels I just inserted them in without making a clear connection. Also most importantly, I organized my arguments as 1. rave culture influences the use of illicit drug use, 2. the environment is negatively impacted due to festivals, 3. test kits need to be more readily available. The professor suggests I should make the environmental argument LAST so it doesn’t seem to jump from topic to topic. I feel one way to connect the negative impacts on the environment with illicit drug use is that when people are under the influence, they don’t make the smartest decisions so they don’t make recycling a priority (i.e., carelessness). I am having trouble finding a source that supports that but please let me know if you were able to find one or not. Max 1500 words. Feel free to remove unesssecary information if it connects the arguments better (more so with the environmetal argument). Preferred language style Simple (Easy vocabulary, simple grammar constructions)