UC personal insight question asks How have you developed and demonstrated that talent over time? 3. Greatest talent or skill? Caregiver;

 

I want to talk about how I’m a caregiver. I started as a babysitter then being a lifeguard for 2 summers at the city pool and I also worked at a private pool. I really want to highlight how I was a water safety instructor (WSI) because I teach little kids and adults the fundamental skills for learning to swim and stay safe in the water

(I wrote this small part of my 350 word essay)
Watching little kids is a big responsibility and I’ve been a babysitter for about 5 years. I started out as a mommy’s helper interacting with my toddler neighbors. Eventually, as I got older and matured more parents trusted me to watch their kids all throughout the day and night.

Things to consider: –Why is this talent or skill meaningful to you? I’m good with people
— Does the talent come naturally or have you worked hard to develop this skill or talent? I’ve worked to develop it I guess but I’ve always been very social/extrovert and outgoing
— Does your talent or skill allow you opportunities in or outside the classroom? If so, what are they and how do they fit into your schedule? 
My job as a lifeguard I have a lot of training and I always know rescues and how to take care of a victim. I got promoted from LG to WSI

The official deadline for this essay is 11/30 but I need help formulating an admissions essay. I thought saying I’m a” caregiver” sounds different and interesting. Let me know if you had any ideas for the direction of the essay or any questions for me. thank you very much